Board Thread:Roleplay Ideas/@comment-26065062-20160713125226/@comment-26210095-20160717140431

If you look at the book, Eragon has a very unhealthy stalkerlike behavior towards Arya (totaly ripped off ASOIAF with that name tbh). Constantly dreaming, obsessive behavior, kidnapping, touching her while she sleeps. Eragon is a really creepy kid.

Also, most of Eragon's place names rip off the LOTR. "Isenstar", "Hadrac Desert", "Beor Mountains", "Beirland", "Melian", "Farthen Dur", "Angrenost", "Ellesari", "Vanilor", "Eridor", "Imiladris", "Isidar". Please, Paolini, come up with something original!

Oh yeah, Eragon's plot is completely unoriginal. Let's examine it:

(Eragon/Luke) lives with his (Uncle and Cousin/Uncle and Aunt) in a remote (villiage/planet) until one day he stumbled upon (a dragon egg/droids) sent by the the captive (elven princess/princess) who knew that the (dragon egg/droid) was important in the downfall of the Empire (hah, he even took the same name) and the cruel Emperor (Galibatorix/Palpatine). (Eragon/Luke) meets (Brom/Obi Wan Kenobi), who becomes his mentor in the ways of the (Dragonrider/Jedi), a hunted and nearly eradicated group of warriors. (Eragon/Luke)'s family is killed by the Empire in an attempt to find the (Dragon Egg/Droids). (Eragon/Luke) leaves home in search of his destiny. Along the way, (Eragon/Luke) meets (Murtagh/Han Solo), a (mysterious young man/smuggler) who helps them to rescue the captive princess (Arya/Leia). (Brom/Obi Wan) sacrifices himself so that they can make their escape.

Eragon is a whiny, spoiled brat. I really hated him as a character. Constantly complaining, making idiotic remarks, the full list of them is in the link above.

There is too much meaningless description in the book. For example:

Three white horses with riders cantered toward the ambush, their heads held high and proud, their coats rippling in the moonlight like liquid silver.

On the first horse was an elf with pointed ears and elegantly slanted eyebrows. His build was slim but strong, like a rapier. A powerful bow was slung on his back. A sword pressed against his side opposite a quiver of arrows fletched with swan feathers.

The last rider had the same fair face and angled features as the other. He carried a long spear in his right hand and a white dagger at his belt. A helm of extraordinary craftsmanship, wrought with amber and gold, rested on his head.

Between these two rode a raven-haired elven lady, who surveyed her surroundings with poise. Framed by long black locks, her deep eyes shone with a driving force. Her clothes were unadorned, yet her beauty was undiminished. At her side was a sword, and on her back a long bow with a quiver. She carried in her lap a pouch that she frequently looked at, as if to reassure herself that it was still there.

So. Much. Meaningless. Detail. We don't need to know about their elegantly slanted eyebrows. Details that might have fit better - a timely look for pursuers, their hands twitching as they held the reins - are abandoned in the face of useless detail. Also, they would help set the mood. Slanted eyebrows are only a distaction from the important things.

Oh yeah, and all the races of Eragon. Hmm... Elves: elegtant forest living creatures with pointy ears and are formidable warriors. Dwarves:  Gruff mining race with beards. Urgals/Orcs: Ugly standard evil, horde warriors, incredibly violent, Kull/Uruk-Hai: Strong, better verions of Urgals/Orcs, can run without tiring, better in almost every respect, ect.

This is not original, this is transplanting Tolkien into a new universe!

So, in conclusion, Eragon is a Star Wars and LOTR ripoff with unoriginal characters, most of them idiotic, written by a stupid 15 year old (and it shows!) who attempted to make something good but utterly failed. This is nothing less then plagurism.

*Drops the Mike and walks off stage*