Board Thread:Middle Earth Roleplay Board/@comment-25597877-20150913192644/@comment-26410366-20150922014103

Minecraftmage113 wrote: "How about I go ahead, and check for the entwives. Also this is unbearably slow." I say as I slowly charge the carg to go faster. knowing that I can reach speeds of almost 120 mph (just a guess for speed reajust to a safe extremely fast speed) without passing out. suddenly a spear hurdles up and as I look down I see one of the tribes of harad. Just as the wing of my carg hit the thrown spear. Then I began to spin down dizzyingly.

This is a preview of me with grammar personally I view it as slower paced but tell me what you think

NOT DIRE The second and third paragraphs need improving.