Thread:Dragonbiscuit/@comment-26535281-20170619012948/@comment-26861992-20170619034206

I think it's as usual for your, well thought out and articulated, though I think there needs to be some more focus to the behind the scenes, the strings being pulled, the investments and all that. I would suggest perhaps adding something highly sketchy into this, perhaps there's some sort of underground ring of merchants pulling all the strings on each fight & such or at least the government as Rin is known for.