Thread:Maltalidenta Kwuitidherali/@comment-26084195-20160127080004/@comment-27718380-20160127081409

Not really my type of story, decent plot but needs fleshing out. Right now, you have no settings beyond the immediate things you can see and your descriptions are short. Also, try and describe people through actions rather than 'he was short' say 'bending down only slightly, he walked into the opening where others had had to crawl' or something.